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ryomakesthings
1 year ago
thank you for sharing this with us, it's a very powerful and evocative poem - can't speak for the original piece but it's a great translation, I'm sure the former is just as biting!
manyface
1 year ago
@xalli @ryo thank you so much!! that means a lot to me! translating stuff is fun, especially when you get to play with it a little! :D
manyface
1 year ago
@caesthoffe thank you so much!! after writing, i was delighted to learn that nobody has ever translated this particular poem before i did (and if they did, it's not online) - j
vagueshape
1 year ago
this was so fun to read!!! i really like the formatting of this one, i think its so unique
manyface
1 year ago
this was so cute and cool!! we liked this a lot, you're so creative with all the different formats you use! - j and shades
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
July 8th is probably one of my favourite poems I've seen from you guys - so, so very powerful and I adore the direction in which you took the prompt. also love the format of march 25th!
manyface
1 year ago
thank you so much, ryo. that means a lot to me - i am very glad my words resonated with you. - shades
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I love haikus! I really like how you interpreted the prompt, it's a very unique concept and you put it very well - I can almost hear a clock ticking faintly in the distance. really like it!
manyface
1 year ago
this is great, thank you so much for sharing. i like how it has a twist despite being so concise. it's powerful. - shades
percevalprintpress
1 year ago
thank you!! yes I always try to challenge myself to end a haiku with a new meaning/twist
manyface
1 year ago
ryo, this is beautiful and very potent. it gives me the impression of an ancient message carved into stone, lost to eternity and found millennia later. - shades
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
beautifully written, and horribly gut-wrenching. your writing is always extremely impressive, and I can only wish you the absolute best for all the life you do get to live - thank you for choosing to spend a little bit of that time sharing your art with us, truly.
owlroost
1 year ago
Thankfully, I get more than ten years to live if this diagnosis gets confirmed. I just won't be able to work or live independently for as long as I'd hoped for.
manyface
1 year ago
your writing is so beautiful and moving, and absolutely devastating. the hope that runs through it is so powerful despite how terrible the circumstances are. please keep that hope alive, and stay safe. thank you for sharing your writing! - j
The part where you're looking up at your body at thinking it isn't you yet it's still responsible for much of what you experience in life is very relatable and saddening to me as someone with chronic illnesses. Thanks for sharing and I hope you keep doing your best with the body you've got.
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
really sorry for your loss. I appreciate you writing about the transition period where the wound is healing but the scar is still staring back, I think you did it and your pet justice. hope you're okay!
manyface
1 year ago
i'm really sorry for your loss! as ryo said, your writing conveys that transitive grieving period very well, and i'm tearing up from reading it. please take care of yourself! - j
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
thank you for sharing this, I can really feel the imprint that your grandmother left in that space - I don't think the departed's spaces could ever not be theirs anymore, and I believe you put that into words beautifully. hope you're doing well!
manyface
1 year ago
i can definitely relate to this one, and i hope you're doing alright! your writing is very sincere and bittersweet, so thank you so much for sharing it! - j
tehuan
1 year ago
ahh how lovely !! you're always free to respond to prompts with whatever feels right-- fiction, screen writing, poetry, personal essays / journal entries, research, etc. whatever it inspires & however it brings you the most joy and fulfillment is best ! will add you to the members list now :]
the-frog-blog
1 year ago
imma actually wait, its like 1 am my time. gn, or whatever time appropriate gesture that fits your time
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I really like how you format your pieces, and I love how visceral and uncompromising the writing is in this one - I think it paints the picture perfectly, your choice of words is very apt!
manyface
1 year ago
I really enjoyed reading it - I love your interpretation of the prompt, and it's so grotesque in a beautiful way. - Efir
manyface
1 year ago
damn, your writing is so intense and clear and… has this arresting presence that demands a reader’s full attention. it’s beautiful and cool!
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
such a powerful piece in its brevity, every single piece of imagery you built is so beautiful and haunting!
grlrot
1 year ago
thank you both so much!!! i often worry that I'm trying to condense too many things into really short texts so I'm really glad it worked!!!!
owlroost
1 year ago
"maybe when you're done there won't be enough of you left to feel the loss." is such a powerful line. Agreed that the brevity of this piece adds to the impact- it doesn't have to be long to hit like a truck. Well done.
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AHH this is so cool & i love that you fucked around with two prompts at once !! awesome move :]
that last line hits hard, I love your version of it. I get the sense of an ember of hope burning through the desperation and exhaustion. Great work!
this is so awesome, i really liked it. it's so powerful and heavy and tender all at once!