Neocities allows anyone to create a free web site to express themselves. Want to create your own awesome site? Join us!
ive never heard of that story, but holy fuck your imagery is soooo vivid i might as well have been there. love the vocabuulary you used :0
@caesthoffe thank you so much!! there are a lot of variants of the story, i was surprised to see just how many there are when i was refreshing myself on the premise. i think i know the story from a soviet cartoon?
really love how compact and punchy this poem is - completely agree with caesthoffe that the imagery is stunning!
@ryo thank you!!! it was the sort of thing that came to me as i was trying to sleep and i had to get up to write it down, haha!
I really appreciate the honesty and self-awareness of this piece, I especially like how you called back to your earlier poems. I love the imagery of the porch in the middle!
Something I've been doing with Muse pieces in general is callbacks! Usually via metaphors echoing forwards. I find it fun and it inspires me to find ways to connect them.
this is really beautiful!!! i loved reading it! thank you so much for sharing, the imagery was fantastic and dazzling!
there is a lot of honesty in this piece that is very well-balanced with a certain artistic flair. I really like the format of the Shakespearean sonnet and the rhyme scheme, I think it adds to the musicality of the piece quite well!
incredibly relatable, love your use of Icarion as a word. also, don't know if you did this on purpose but "i pray everyday for my body to align with the plans i fashion in my mind" is very tran/non-binary coded, which i loved.
Sometimes you read the first line of a poem and know it'll be good. This is one of those poems. The rest followed through, but that first line is going to stick with me.
this was wonderful and relatable... i loved the rhyme scheme and the overall sentiment. i like that it seemed to be positive at the end, there is hope! remember to take care of yourself.
ohhh maybe i just love how a blank website page feels like a cathedral but this hit so hard & so well ... rlly lovely imagery ! !
@angelogistics there is something holy to be found in enclosed emptiness… thank you for the praise <3
what a beautiful and poignant poem - seconding that the imagery is stunning, you incapsulated so much history, grief and hope in a few words. thank you for sharing your artistry with us!
The fractal horses of all things really connected with me. Gorgeous visuals, and it feels rooted somehow in a way that a lot of poetry doesn't.
@owlroost thank you, i had fun imagining an infinite scale of little horses heheh
this was really awesome - everybody who said that the imagery is amazing is absolutely correct. an amazing piece. thank you for sharing!
absolutely love the format! very effective choice to have no punctuation, it makes the abundant imagery all the more potent!
thank you so much ryo!!! i was worried it would take away a lot of the clarity (not a bad thing in itself) but that that would compromise the impact. i'm glad it didn't!
this was so beautiful, i genuinely feel a bit tearful now! i'm really glad to have read this! thank you for sharing!
this is such a well-crafted and evocative piece of writing. the last two lines especially are so powerful!
i really liked this one! it really highlights just how panicked one's anxious thoughts can become, and it really nailed it on the head with how quickly it tends to escalate too. i especially like the touch of making it a run-on.
i love the rambling style of this!! i feel like it helps add to the emotion of the piece mwah
i like this a lot!! it's very cool and the run on structure is excellent. great work as always, ryo!
really liked the escalation of scale and how you cheekily tied it back to the beginning ^^
I really like how you focussed on not only the graduality of distress but that of hope, as well. I appreciate how it ends on a note of self-forgiveness, the whole thing put a smile on my face. the format is also very interesting!
thank you! when writing it i was thinking of a computer terminal, and the straightforwardness of prompt fills.
this was really nice to read, i'm glad there was hope as well as despair and that it all felt like a process with the best intentions of the character/voice in mind, by the end of it!
this is so amazing... i really loved reading through it, it's beautiful and the repetition is so powerful and poignant. so proud of you for sharing this, thank you.
what a beautiful and powerful lament. I love how you went down each line one at a time and how terribly human it all is. thank you for your art!
this is such a beautiful poem! i'm glad that ikb 79 speaks to you so much, it really is a wonderful shade of blue. - j
i love this sm ! what a perfect moment to focus in on (hi sorry didn't want to change accounts to reply)
art music videogames programming games anime personal food writing cats blog gaming movies books photography comics fashion design animation horror game furry coding technology manga portfolio drawing programacion ocs cute poetry education html sports fun history musica animals kpop arte reading film philosophy literature programing roblox web science tech politics minecraft travel nature videogame computers school retro youtube gamedev pokemon cartoons 2000s illustration videojuegos video memes fantasy internet blogging diary life dogs comic random videos test linux love gardening webcomic pink idk queer nostalgia kawaii news fanfiction fandom worldbuilding business arg oc silly cars y2k stuff health emo tv 90s vocaloid aesthetic journal cooking ai learning fiction space math css scifi website media stories software graphics homestuck lgbt football cutecore cat crafts marketing sanrio goth commissions culture punk 3d etc sport films pixelart painting javascript funny digitalart archive artist characters arts religion dnd metal trans development lgbtq entertainment cool me fanart scene graphicdesign code diy streaming comida sonic webcomics rpg psychology dance webcore program story comedy roleplay educacion gay webdesign aboutme cinema crochet hacking friends indie plants weird informatica baking computer cyberpunk electronics editing makeup ttrpg journaling languages engineering soccer weirdcore oldweb it reviews guitar creativity vaporwave basketball originalcharacters zines rock community social about html5 lifestyle clothes discord fnaf aesthetics series vtuber project everything shows information study pets nintendo testing spirituality sewing photos shop storytelling language mlp beauty clothing movie architecture japan blogs money undertale biology magic crypto digital experimental blinkies vintage nothing radio tecnologia shopping resume furries lain cosplay thoughts fitness futbol ttrpgs coffee japanese chat info ghchs physics autism occult other book creative lore deltarune bugs vr wip websites carrd witchcraft birds flowers profile dolls cybersecurity site television system research finance alternative astronomy hobbies splatoon juegos webdevelopment gamedevelopment events apps band python transgender singing linguistics free projects anything meme rap pixels genshin work dreams deportes fish fandoms fortnite sleep photo touhou personalwebsite toys windows fanfic robots vampires developer aliens theatre security all mentalhealth fansite knitting puzzle app wiki fnf mathematics online dog pizza links lol family a data interests humor drawings sleeping characterdesign roleplaying stamps animations astrology dragons interactive twitch english modding adventure breakcore zonelets crafting gallery cartoon skateboarding mystery gamedesign collecting twine no bio teaching gothic gifs coquette tvshows scenecore hobby android ffxiv pixel home rp tf2 privacy gyaru death noise osc hiking tarot poems dancing zine medicine visualnovels shrine dreamcore objectshows resources danganronpa romance jfashion graphic moda hiphop essays journalism meow chess intro swag awesome audio deporte communism puzzles rpgs law plushies podcast robotics progamming none creepypasta car frutigeraero bitcoin gym lolita socialmedia tcc blender misc omori ecommerce mario recipes things yaoi computing myself hellokitty doom boardgames scratch christianity girls mythology java production electronic dark pictures bfdi paranormal ocean vkei utau stars clowns vent activism wrestling anarchism indiegames educational old piano introduction spanish webdev pc images gatos novels epic student flash lesbian musicals 80s help geography truecrime traveling js bunnies god running tumblr dev feminism pjsk cafe computerscience realestate creepy vtubers estudiante transformers jpop translation travelling otherkin maths marvel yuri store trains southpark jewelry enstars plurality programas programar environment unblocked foods 3dmodeling animes baseball tabletop college event starwars monsters filmmaking brasil forum pastel tools services warriorcats curso retrogaming lego escuela bts homepage chemistry multimedia designing sharks yes podcasts techno hardware closedspecies style popculture collection yoga grunge weed search shoes outdoors stickers cyber persona jazz craft opensource kirby whatever therian dinosaurs construction args songs weather shitposting gamer turismo videoediting cricket novel fotografia birthday kidcore insects acting mcr collage maps angels freedom sound peliculas tourism restaurant horses text cryptocurrency learn depression salud vhs economics conspiracy miku cine surrealism petz studying tea lgbtqia volleyball drugs people socialism ecology medical blockchain analysis egl service miriadax digitalmarketing jogos supernatural animanga bl hi did species skating homework informacion trading mobile dj kandi hockey cv world furniture jesus ideas drama academic videography modeling theater bsd programmer surreal css3 fishing artwork animales general pop ropa swimming rats libros edm tutorials bible truth foss alterhuman author sciencefiction racing vlog tattoos frogs estudio scary historia guns rpgmaker cultura wedding chatting videogaming practice twitter genshinimpact halloween healthcare networking 3dprinting plural cleaning water cryptids library jjba google blue conlang soft mods ambient skincare glitch alt women server noticias brazil anarchy chill class hair erotica company society programa tiktok ghosts review tennis live cs green schoolproject visualnovel neocities onepiece prompts ux frontend aviation christian academia bot pinterest hardcore friendship nerd draw bands knowledge tareas cycling rhythmgames startrek sculpture kids crime datascience lostmedia future university evangelion advertising bikes dating shitpost training quotes church ultrakill shrines synthesizers character graffiti jobs analog retrogames sociology tecnology apple tic literatura cozy amor revival sites idols instagram viajes archives desarrollo tarea anthropology house theory sustainability blood php creation entretenimiento programs finalfantasy camping theology neopets batman webseries eating girly photoshop halflife performance disney new gacha designer cult something industrial hack download anthro silliness rainbow writer programacao communication chaos spooky otaku play animal mylittlepony articles colors creatures meditation esoteric liminal magick ar garden index 3dart cards analoghorror building visualkei desing french joke youtuber tokipona miscellaneous vampire conlangs sketching illustrations overwatch kin jokes repair trabajo zelda dc disability shoegaze vrchat csgo facts tattoo paganism black rants os originalcharacter voiceacting animalcrossing notes medieval exercise musicproduction content hotel magazine purple manhwa sims club 4chan talking f1 webring cheese folklore developing vtubing rambling yugioh satire party vinyl interactivefiction kdrama trinkets artes mushrooms map kink gender lolitafashion mtg rave ceramics archival marxism doodles retrocomputing unblockedgames pet agriculture vegan tips shifting generator selfship commission military superheroes pruebas ios embroidery quiz beer unix scp stupid tokusatsu time projectsekai geek happy proyecto oldroblox ranfren self digimon spiritual mecha conlanging writting secret ciencia practicas bass chiptune underground men hosting handmade netflix nft educativo adhd doctorwho gis riddle geocities statistics private garfield tutorial calculator spiderman creativewriting wow electronica mcyt travels filmes dungeonsanddragons musician original words lofi motorcycles studio sonicthehedgehog tamagotchi ui creating sweets farming products streamer nails academico spongebob videgames wellness guide e hyperpop label network cities beginner 1 decor mangas more shit steam islam support yapping
this is a wonderful poem and i can feel your expression of pride through the words and images! i especially like that third stanza! :)
it's always a very lovely experience to see other people expressing pride in their own way, and I think you did so very effectively with your imagery. there is this sort of soft joy about it that I really like, almost like gentle breeze through an open window - good work!