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ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I love the format of a bullet list, it's almost like there is no need to speak the connecting tissue out loud because it is so clear in its essence. lovely poem as always!
manyface
1 year ago
thank you so much ryo!!! i'm so glad the format worked as intended hehe, being a part of muse ariadne and seeing how differently people format their work makes us wanna experiment more!! - j
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I like how raw and 'unclean' the feeling you're communicating is, kind of like those thoughts that we find too ugly or shameful to share despite being very common and human. I really like the format too, and the contrast created by the differing lengths of the two paragraphs!
manyface
1 year ago
RYO THIS IS THE COOLEST THING WE'VE SEEN FROM YOU. IT'S SO COOL WE ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!
tehuan
1 year ago
this week's prompt though !! look for patterns in chaotic & βrandomβ events, experiences, behaviors, etc. these could be in nature, in our own emotions & actions (or inactions), in the structure of a city, in a computer, in a body. do these patterns uncover an underlying order or meaning? are they coincidental?
manyface
1 year ago
this is an awesome prompt and one of my favourite subjects :D !!!!! very excited to write on this topic. your prompts are always so wonderful! - j
tehuan
1 year ago
you're so sweet thank you !! i'm really glad, and i hope the prompt takes you somewhere you really like !! can't wait to read it :]
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
this must not have been easy to share, thank you for letting us in. I absolutely love the sentence about encounters evaporating, it feels like the calm after the storm that destroyed your shelter - it's bitter but quiet still. if it's of any help it is quite normal to have dreams that our conscious self finds disturbing or inappropriate, I hope you are healing and are doing well!
manyface
1 year ago
@ryo thank you for reading and understanding! im actually okay right now, sometimes i just write extremely heavy stuff to exorcise it from my mind. i actually am healing so much and doing better than ever, writing stuff like this is part of the process! - j
owlroost
1 year ago
He sounds like he was a wonderful man. I feel like I got a little of your love towards him through your writing- he might be gone, but it's okay to still care.
manyface
1 year ago
this was extremely beautiful and heartfelt!! it makes me think of my own grandparents, my maternal grandfather died when i was 7 too... all your emotions are okay and valid and please take as long as you need to grieve! - j
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
thank you so much for sharing this with us - it's such a bittersweet piece. I remember feeling that same misplaced anger you speak of - I don't think we ever fully stop grieving but I believe it means they left an impact on you and that piece of them will be with you for as long as you live.
owlroost
1 year ago
Love the use of repetition and spacing! Adds to that feeling of glancing at someone hoping they'll accidentally meet your eyes.
manyface
1 year ago
seconding owlroost! the use of space here is wonderful! you did a very good job of conveying that emotion of brief serendipity! - j
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I absolutely love your vocabulary and the imagery you paint through it, very evocative!
manyface
1 year ago
wow, this was so cool and visceral and interesting to read... your word choices are sublime!!! - j
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
this is such a well-written yet raw piece - I definitely recognise the long-gone pattern of intrusive thoughts. I also really appreciate the advice at the beginning and at the end, it's all so very thoughtful. thank you so much for sharing!
manyface
1 year ago
this is a really good piece, and i am really happy that you had gabriel in your life for that brief encounter. we've struggled with suicidality too, your piece really captures that thought pattern well. my sister's bf is called gabriel, maybe good people are just called that... - j
sneekrealm
1 year ago
ok this made me cry (tho ive fortunately not had to deal w such thoughts, but simply seem to be slipping into some rough patch these past couple days that im tryin to handle ok enough)
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
such an evocative poem, loved the story! really interesting rhyme scheme too, kind of like a double triplet variation of terza rima
manyface
1 year ago
thank you!! it's based off the frog princess fairytale, the slavic version of it! and the rhyme scheme is genuinely my favourite rhyme scheme to use... i think we first encountered it in "the destroyer" by robert graves, and then decided that it was just the best rhyme scheme and ours now. - j
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
love the format, feels like somewhat of a hero's journey - the process of unravelling and rebuilding one's identity. Thank you for sharing, and congrats on your first prompt!
museariadne
1 year ago
thank you sm for joining !! this is such a beautiful piece (i v much agree & love that i can feel a journey through it). can't wait to see your future entries :]
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
it's incredible how much soul you can condense in shorter pieces, your last entry is very bittersweet. also in love with last week's prompt, came out really well!
percevalprintpress
1 year ago
@ryomakesthings Thank you!! Most of my poems start out longer and I cut them down in editing but this is also me being obsessive about making every word have a meaning
mism4tchedsocks
1 year ago
"i'd wash my hands but the blood keeps coming" yoooo. love this imagery!!
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I actually really like how short it is, it's concise! also like the use of biblical references when describing the corporeal and the mundane, though that is something I personally always find beautiful
manyface
1 year ago
ohhhh i love your writing and the imagery running through it!!! it's so potent and raw!
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I really like the contrast between the reverent tone of the piece and the visceral imagery scattered throughout, I think it works really well!
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of course !! that totally makes sense :] we hope to have you back whenever you feel like you have the capacity ! π
tysm <3