that's honestly so impressive! your choice of words and structure feel very carefully thought-out, I really like how it flows!
After re-reading it, I figured ghazl sounds better in Arabic due to the motion of its vowels and lack thereof, but English may still have a chance if the rhyme scheme was just right.
I like this one https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poetrymagazine/poems/90977/ghazal-for-becoming-your-own-country
I suppose we can also honor the OG's. This is one of the most important poets in the Middle East https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poetrymagazine/poems/144612/where-did-the-handsome-beloved-go
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