ryomakesthings
1 year ago
these pieces really struck a chord - they feel like someone discovering their own mortality for the first time in practice, which is something both relevant and hard to capture. great job!
the-chavez-zone
1 year ago
i adore how the formatting elevates the feeling of the piece :] I love it
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
there is so much love and peace coming through in your poems, even when you express a certain grief. it makes for a really cozy experience as a reader, really like them!
manyface
1 year ago
i really enjoyed your prompt fills for the wordpool week and the transition week! they were so beautiful, your writing is both delicate and strong. - j
percevalprintpress
1 year ago
This is really moving, I love how it starts and ends with the same line
manyface
1 year ago
@percevalprintpress thank you!!! though, the lines are slightly different! - j and therry
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
your use of enjambment is inspired, you have a way of moving readers from one line to the next that works so well. incredible poem!
manyface
1 year ago
@symphonic thank you!!! therry wanted to write about our first transition between system hosts, we hope it resonates :0 - j
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
this is so beautiful and vulnerable, you put so well into words the aftermath of a kind of liminal grief. thank you for sharing!
chimeramanticore
1 year ago
this is really nice and bittersweet, im no poetry expert but i love the way you structured this. simple and poignant, i love it
I actually think you used the prompt as a jumping-off point very well - you explored the idea of asymmetry as a discrepancy between previously and currently held notions beautifully. it's a strong piece, love the final line!
gosh this is so very beautiful!
oh this is amazing!!! i really enjoyed your exploration of the prompt actually, i think there is a certain asymmetry in growing up and filling the space that opens up to you.