absolutely love the imagery you built, the visual element was a really nice touch!
i like this work a lot!!! it's very different to my poem, but that's okay! i love seeing all the responses :)
what a beautiful monologue - really love the images you built through your prose!
that's honestly so impressive! your choice of words and structure feel very carefully thought-out, I really like how it flows!
I think you encapsulated perfectly the idea of adulthood as compromise, there is something so beautiful about how you used such a small moment in daily life to communicate a strong concept!