ryomakesthings
1 year ago
love the format, feels like somewhat of a hero's journey - the process of unravelling and rebuilding one's identity. Thank you for sharing, and congrats on your first prompt!
museariadne
1 year ago
thank you sm for joining !! this is such a beautiful piece (i v much agree & love that i can feel a journey through it). can't wait to see your future entries :]
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
it's incredible how much soul you can condense in shorter pieces, your last entry is very bittersweet. also in love with last week's prompt, came out really well!
percevalprintpress
1 year ago
@ryomakesthings Thank you!! Most of my poems start out longer and I cut them down in editing but this is also me being obsessive about making every word have a meaning
mism4tchedsocks
1 year ago
"i'd wash my hands but the blood keeps coming" yoooo. love this imagery!!
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I actually really like how short it is, it's concise! also like the use of biblical references when describing the corporeal and the mundane, though that is something I personally always find beautiful
manyface
1 year ago
ohhhh i love your writing and the imagery running through it!!! it's so potent and raw!
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I really like the contrast between the reverent tone of the piece and the visceral imagery scattered throughout, I think it works really well!
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I really like the idea of evolution as a conscious progress, as something you can shape and choose for yourself. powerful stuff, thank you for sharing!
soulbox
1 year ago
Thank you for sharing this. I feel the same, sometimes I feel like I was born wrong. I hope you're able to live your life how you want to. ^^
tehuan
1 year ago
oh this is such a wonderful piece! i love the changes in focus and how you used something usually man-made in contrast with the idea of nature and its' selections, ebbs & flow. thank you for sharing :] and there's no wrong way to answer a prompt. it's an inspiration, not a test. i'm glad you got something from it π
owlroost
1 year ago
Agreed that there is no wrong way to answer a prompt! I love the font choice, by the way. It's pleasing AND easy to read.
soulbox
1 year ago
@tehuan Thank you! I love the questions and I understand that they're super abstract but sometimes my brain feels like it has a legit hard time understanding them so I feel as though I'm doing something wrong still lol. The questions get me thinking, regardless!
soulbox
1 year ago
@owlroost Thank you! The font is called Simple Plan. Easy to read is what I was looking for so I'm glad it's a success. ^^
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I love the parallel between human creation and human existence - evolution as a certain inevitable cyclicality. concise yet beautiful!
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
such impressive writing, very picturesque and well-crafted yet speaking to a very raw inner world. both a joy to read!
grlrot
1 year ago
oh i LOVE this, the last stanza especially, and the use of slashes to make it keep going is so awesome...
owlroost
1 year ago
That second stanza... that Resonated. May those that come after have bread pudding and tangerines (good taste).
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I love the bittersweet feeling of this poem - especially the wall of slashes at the end, the empty space is very powerful!
lovely !! changed it just now :]
perfect, thanks!