ryomakesthings
2 years ago
love the format, feels like somewhat of a hero's journey - the process of unravelling and rebuilding one's identity. Thank you for sharing, and congrats on your first prompt!
museariadne
2 years ago
thank you sm for joining !! this is such a beautiful piece (i v much agree & love that i can feel a journey through it). can't wait to see your future entries :]
ryomakesthings
2 years ago
it's incredible how much soul you can condense in shorter pieces, your last entry is very bittersweet. also in love with last week's prompt, came out really well!
percevalprintpress
2 years ago
@ryomakesthings Thank you!! Most of my poems start out longer and I cut them down in editing but this is also me being obsessive about making every word have a meaning
mism4tchedsocks
2 years ago
"i'd wash my hands but the blood keeps coming" yoooo. love this imagery!!
ryomakesthings
2 years ago
I actually really like how short it is, it's concise! also like the use of biblical references when describing the corporeal and the mundane, though that is something I personally always find beautiful
manyface
2 years ago
ohhhh i love your writing and the imagery running through it!!! it's so potent and raw!
ryomakesthings
2 years ago
I really like the contrast between the reverent tone of the piece and the visceral imagery scattered throughout, I think it works really well!
ryomakesthings
2 years ago
I really like the idea of evolution as a conscious progress, as something you can shape and choose for yourself. powerful stuff, thank you for sharing!
soulbox
2 years ago
Thank you for sharing this. I feel the same, sometimes I feel like I was born wrong. I hope you're able to live your life how you want to. ^^
ryomakesthings
2 years ago
such impressive writing, very picturesque and well-crafted yet speaking to a very raw inner world. both a joy to read!
I love your writing. You have such a way with words.
thank you!!!
such an evocative poem, loved the story! really interesting rhyme scheme too, kind of like a double triplet variation of terza rima
thank you!! it's based off the frog princess fairytale, the slavic version of it! and the rhyme scheme is genuinely my favourite rhyme scheme to use... i think we first encountered it in "the destroyer" by robert graves, and then decided that it was just the best rhyme scheme and ours now. - j