this is so beautiful and vulnerable, you put so well into words the aftermath of a kind of liminal grief. thank you for sharing!
this is really nice and bittersweet, im no poetry expert but i love the way you structured this. simple and poignant, i love it
this is really great, i feel for you. thank you for sharing your words and experiences!
this is such a beautiful thought - we don't talk enough about how non-linear life can be at times. congratulations on your first piece!
this is such a strong and vulnerable piece of writing - thank you so much for sharing it with us, this is beyond beautiful!
I think you encapsulated perfectly the idea of adulthood as compromise, there is something so beautiful about how you used such a small moment in daily life to communicate a strong concept!
absolutely love the imagery you built, the visual element was a really nice touch!
This is really moving, I love how it starts and ends with the same line
@percevalprintpress thank you!!! though, the lines are slightly different! - j and therry
your use of enjambment is inspired, you have a way of moving readers from one line to the next that works so well. incredible poem!
@ryomakesthings thank you so much!! that means a lot :> - j and therry
holy crappp this is so well written
@symphonic thank you!!! therry wanted to write about our first transition between system hosts, we hope it resonates :0 - j