vagueshape
1 year ago
ooo i love how you phrased this, it's simple but evocative. "everything of the world, and nothing of myself" is such a good line.
caesthoffe
1 year ago
love love LOVE the structure, repetition is one of my favorite poettic devices !!!
manyface
1 year ago
this is an excellent poem, it's really punchy and gets the message across beautifully without being too forceful... well done!!
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
obsessed with the humour and lightness of this, and the detailed culinary notes. love it!
vagueshape
1 year ago
@ryomakesthings thank you!!! i felt like writing something fun, but also complaining about that cup of coffee lol (i ended up finishing it, it somehow got better, or maybe i just got used to the taste)
manyface
1 year ago
omg this was so funny and heartwarming to read... i'm imagining it perfectly, thank you for sharing!
the-chavez-zone
1 year ago
i love how it says so much with just a handful of words! i love the contrast! incredible :]
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I love the kindness and growth shining through in this, really like the format too!
manyface
1 year ago
this is an incredible piece, it's so reverent and intense and full of emotion. you are an amazing writer
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
beautiful work, there is so much life and detail in your writing. thank you for sharing!
snipchu
1 year ago
"love scares me when all i have known is asymmetry" hits way too close to home. what a creative definition!!
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
this is such an impressive poem - love the contrast between the inner world of the piece and the mathematical language!
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I think the empty space to the right is really adding something to the piece. what a fun format, didn't know it was called that!
manyface
1 year ago
this is such a creative way to interpret the prompt! i liked your poem a lot !!! :D
I love how you interpreted the prompt - it's such a raw feeling that you're describing. really powerful piece!
i like this a lot!!! it's very powerful and visceral and i enjoy that about poetry in general, so well done :D - j