manyface
1 year ago
this is a wonderful poem and i can feel your expression of pride through the words and images! i especially like that third stanza! :)
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
it's always a very lovely experience to see other people expressing pride in their own way, and I think you did so very effectively with your imagery. there is this sort of soft joy about it that I really like, almost like gentle breeze through an open window - good work!
caesthoffe
1 year ago
ive never heard of that story, but holy fuck your imagery is soooo vivid i might as well have been there. love the vocabuulary you used :0
manyface
1 year ago
@caesthoffe thank you so much!! there are a lot of variants of the story, i was surprised to see just how many there are when i was refreshing myself on the premise. i think i know the story from a soviet cartoon?
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
really love how compact and punchy this poem is - completely agree with caesthoffe that the imagery is stunning!
manyface
1 year ago
@ryo thank you!!! it was the sort of thing that came to me as i was trying to sleep and i had to get up to write it down, haha!
ryomakesthings
1 year ago
I really appreciate the honesty and self-awareness of this piece, I especially like how you called back to your earlier poems. I love the imagery of the porch in the middle!
owlroost
1 year ago
Something I've been doing with Muse pieces in general is callbacks! Usually via metaphors echoing forwards. I find it fun and it inspires me to find ways to connect them.
manyface
1 year ago
this is really beautiful!!! i loved reading it! thank you so much for sharing, the imagery was fantastic and dazzling!
this piece is so cute and sweet and touching! and so is your dog! what is their name?
@manyface her name is molly :) she's 14 years old
awwwwh she's so adorable !! and this piece is such a lovely portrait of her :]