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Like this?: https://ninjacoder58.neocities.org/Hip%20Hop%20Images.html/88x31.png

Interesting is what I was aiming for. I like the way your page is set up. You should definitely expand on it, and keep the black with sparkly blue.

Thanks for the feedback on my page! I will figure out how else to do besides add on to my fictional project. Have you read it, by the way?

*do the expanding

I read over parts of it. It is very well formatted. The unique style with each character dialog having its own color and intent made it easy to follow. It needs more detail to really come alive, but how you're displaying it is spot on. I'll keep checking it out as you update.

Thank you!

What details would you add?

More details in surroundings. At least something to give a better idea of what it's like in the future, a mention of more specific items in the room maybe. It may be your intention to keep that short and left to imagination, in which case don't change anything. When you cut between scenes without describing much, it's very easy to imagine it happening in current or older times. I might also be missing points though.

I went to flight school with this cadet...they were thrown out for hacking into the Multi-Intelligence Network Drive through a regular pedestrian terminal. Be careful.

Congratulations, Passenger Eastathenaeum! Due to your exceptional performance in stress testing, you have been selected for a newly created role on our security team. Please make your way to your new office. Please note that, due to the sensitive nature of this role, your workspace is isolated from the rest of the ship and is extremely secure to ensure maximum efficacy.

@nohappynonsense Thank you for your diligent work, dear Passenger. We have flagged this entity as a potential agent of Entropy and will keep a close watch. UBWU