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Interesting is what I was aiming for. I like the way your page is set up. You should definitely expand on it, and keep the black with sparkly blue.

Thanks for the feedback on my page! I will figure out how else to do besides add on to my fictional project. Have you read it, by the way?

*do the expanding

I read over parts of it. It is very well formatted. The unique style with each character dialog having its own color and intent made it easy to follow. It needs more detail to really come alive, but how you're displaying it is spot on. I'll keep checking it out as you update.

Thank you!

What details would you add?

More details in surroundings. At least something to give a better idea of what it's like in the future, a mention of more specific items in the room maybe. It may be your intention to keep that short and left to imagination, in which case don't change anything. When you cut between scenes without describing much, it's very easy to imagine it happening in current or older times. I might also be missing points though.

Hello! You're welcome! It looks sweet!