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hey, i need help. i'm trying (hint: trying) to write a story. and i would like to get some feedback on what i have so far. the story currently contains: mild abuse (it's there, but for now no real descriptions), and suicide.
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fuck being mature
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i love the pictures so much !! ♡♡
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layout, updated ; most pages are now hidden and you'll need the link to find them for now
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lurvervi's collection was updated.
4 years ago
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two weeks ? i havent updated in two weeks ? well, i guess i'll update soon . the front page has too much on it, so i'll have to find out a way to declutter and give this site a whole new format :(
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the story -> https://www.wattpad.com/story/205655740-find-your-wings
I’ll be reading that asap
Update: it’s easy to read, in a good way. I noticed a typo: you wrote *my are eyes* somewhere in it. I look forward the next episodes.
To expand on that (sorry to triple post) I’d say that it’s a good first-part of the introduction of your story. No misstep so far.
Okay & i'll work on the ultra stupid typos