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hey, i need help. i'm trying (hint: trying) to write a story. and i would like to get some feedback on what i have so far. the story currently contains: mild abuse (it's there, but for now no real descriptions), and suicide.
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lmbdfn 4 years ago

I’ll be reading that asap

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lmbdfn 4 years ago

Update: it’s easy to read, in a good way. I noticed a typo: you wrote *my are eyes* somewhere in it. I look forward the next episodes.

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lmbdfn 4 years ago

To expand on that (sorry to triple post) I’d say that it’s a good first-part of the introduction of your story. No misstep so far.

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lurvervi 4 years ago

Okay & i'll work on the ultra stupid typos

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